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4thkeybladeholder
10-14-2007, 10:50 PM
>.>
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okay, so i was 'hired' to make a song for a band that lives near me.
But, I kinda need comments on how the lyrics came out. I just need to know if you think it sounds good. Its pretty bad, in my opinion. >.<
The reason I think that is because they wanted me to write about something certain, and in this case something that could be depressing or whatever.

So, as a result, I got this. lol






Do you feel it?

The senses burn
Your fear digging through?

Your so afraid,
Whats the matter
Feel the sensation
What happened to you?
Knowledge of the circle?
Feeling of loneliness?
Why are you so lost?
What are you afraid of?
Come closer,
And we will accept you
Just wait though,
You wont find the truth
Its all begun,
We got what we want
Now we can throw you away
Until we need you again
But you wont know
Until it’s reality

Your so afraid,
Begin with the fantasy
End with the reality
lost again…

Your so afraid,
Begin with the fantasy
End with the reality
Lost… lost again

Your found again…
You lost it all…
You feel it coming back…
But you just sit and let it repeat again…


The feeling of trust
Collapses with your realization
Your reality
Is just another fantasy
And once you feel the true reality
Your lost again
It repeats all over,
And you keep accepting it.
Hope wins out,
You wish your fantasy
Was a reality.



so?

Aniu, Lover of Riku
06-18-2008, 11:39 PM
Hi these song lyrics are beautiful. Don't be afraid to show your emotions in your songs OK. Keep writing them!:yayz:

4thkeybladeholder
06-19-2008, 01:14 AM
This was... Quite a while ago. xD

But, thanks all the same.