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Kh3fan02
11-01-2007, 06:27 AM
Sleep grabs the mind and never lets go,
You begin to drift off to the place where hopes thrive to exist.
Unwillingly, you lose all track of time and matter,
As images become so clear and define.
The unconcious life is now playing god,
And the gentle beat of your heart gives him his purpose.

The first snowflake falls from the heavens,
Leading the storm that thunders in the night.
All the color of betrayal and secrecy,
Erased as the snow takes its place.
The thunder pounds in the sky with such fierocity,
That even you alone won't hear.

For you see, in your dream the night may be silent,
But it is the snow that hides its presence.
Your memory has been altered,
And the color that was once there is now gone.
You have a blank canvas in your hands,
The color of red appears no more.

The night is decietful at its best,
No more are your memories filled with such agony.
This is the place where hopes thrive to exist,
This is the setting of how you forget.
But when the snow melts from time's lingered past,
Will the mind still remember the life it once had?

Wzrdto25
11-01-2007, 08:44 AM
simply the best =)

DestinyHolder
11-01-2007, 10:04 AM
That is just amazing.
I love your Poem

Kh3fan02
11-01-2007, 12:59 PM
Thank you! I hope it wasn't too complicated to understand..

Yeah..uhh..this is one of my "hidden" skills that not too many people know about. But I guess it's about to change, lol! I hate writing rhyming poems, so a good majority of the ones I write are like this. :cool:

Xykru
11-01-2007, 04:02 PM
Wonderfully done. It is not often I can find one who understands that poems don't HAVE to rhyme... In fact I prefer it when they don't!

Keep up the good work, I hope to see more from you.

Demon_Yuki_Roxas
11-01-2007, 04:53 PM
*is amazed*whoa.........^_^ COOL

Kh3fan02
11-01-2007, 05:16 PM
Keep up the good work, I hope to see more from you.

Have have a few more "up my sleeve"...so to say! lol!

Thank you for your comments guys..It makes me feel a bit more comfortable posting my thoughts/work up for you all to read. Hehe..expect one most likely later tonight!

ShadowXIV
11-01-2007, 09:28 PM
very very good =] ill probly post some poetry up soon too so im hoping minell be as good as urs ha

cbchick
11-01-2007, 10:46 PM
beautiful poem Justin :]

V. Valentine
11-02-2007, 02:52 AM
thats about the first time I got interested in a poem...the kind we have at school are...very 'to expressive its annoying' but these kind are the ones I enjoy and help you open up to...

no some stupid doulphin swimming around.... (stupid poem I read in english book....don't ask)

anyway....

very good :D