need help!....Again!!!!!

[Rex]

this is what I need help with

the stroy line (if it need to be changed or added on to

the name of the RPG


if the opening goe's with the RPG


The charater sheet

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In 1692, in the Ipswich Colony of Massachusetts, five families with untold power formed a covenant of silence. One family, lusting for more, was banished; their bloodline disappearing without a trace--until now. the Sons of Ipswich, four young students at the elite Spencer Academy who are bound by their sacred ancestry. As descendants of the original families who settled in Ipswich Colony in the 1600's, the boys have all been born with special powers. When the body of a dead student is discovered after a party, secrets begin to unravel which threaten to break the covenant of silence that has protected their families for hundreds of years. now Years later after Caleb Danvers destroyed Chase Collins a moment of Peace fell in the small colony of Massachusetts, but unknown to him new members of The Covenant have risen in the lage city of New york, but some have gone down different paths. some have joined together to form the Zxpromethieus. this group has one thing on there minds...destroy any and all who have tampered with there familys and there powers, and yet another group named The Atlas. A group that wants peace between The Covenant and others who can't handel their power. The two groups now wage war aginst eachother.The Zxpromethieus leader is a man named Nails Darkheart.the first son of the geeatest Covenant member. Then theres Rex Darkheart the second sone of Max. Max gave his power to Rex knowing his two sons would fight one day. he felt he could trust Rex with his power. the two groups are more dangeruse now then ever..becasue each group has found a way to use their power with out aging
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charater sheet:
username:
name:
Gender:
age:
bio:
powers (only 5)
Wepons:
Side: (Eather The Zxpromethieus or The Atlas)
apperence:
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My Charater sheet:
username: rex
name: Rex Darkheart
Gender: Male
age: 28
bio: Rex has only one thing on his mind. kill his older brother to bring peace in the world
powers:
Fire
Ice
thunder
Earth
teleporting
Wepons: Demon sword and two three barrel guns
Demon sword:
http://s231.photobucket.com/albums/ee244/rexdarkheart/Weapons/?action=view&current=redqueen.jpg
Two three barrel guns:
http://s231.photobucket.com/albums/ee244/rexdarkheart/Weapons/?action=view&current=dirgeofcerberus11.jpg
Side:The Atlas
apperence:
http://s231.photobucket.com/albums/ee244/rexdarkheart/Anime%20Guys/?action=view&current=NeitherSaintNorSinner.jpg

username: rex
name: Nails Darkheart
Gender: Male
age: 30
bio: Uknown
powers:
Darkness
Ocean
Ceature summon
Chaos
teleporting
Wepons: Two Scythe blade
Scythe blade:
http://s231.photobucket.com/albums/ee244/rexdarkheart/Weapons/?action=view&current=sword2.jpg
Side: The Zxpromethieus
apperence:
http://s231.photobucket.com/albums/ee244/rexdarkheart/Anime%20Guys/?action=view&current=1421_tk01pczen_2953_0002.jpg

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Rules:
1.Keep this at a rating of PG13 or less.
2.Let everyone have their moment.
3.Your not allowed to kill a character unless your premeted by the user of the character you wanna kill.
4.Respect other players.
5.no spamming
6.no god-modding
7. have fun.
8. No other Darkhearts!!!
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Opening:
QeorTQCJkhs

[KH2_FinalSora]

Okay, my first suggestion. I'm not sure why, but I can't seem to read the full paragraph. Try seperating it at points in which things change. I can't really describe it...if you look at my Third Shadow War sketch (last post that I did), it's long, but it's seperated into a lot of paragraphs...I dunno, it might make it easier to read.

Also, correct Grammer would help people read and get interested in the story and such. I saw a few missed capitals and such.

[Rex]

Okay, my first suggestion. I'm not sure why, but I can't seem to read the full paragraph. Try seperating it at points in which things change. I can't really describe it...if you look at my Third Shadow War sketch (last post that I did), it's long, but it's seperated into a lot of paragraphs...I dunno, it might make it easier to read.

Also, correct Grammer would help people read and get interested in the story and such. I saw a few missed capitals and such.

do you mean like this. (Corrections have not been made yet)

In 1692, in the Ipswich Colony of Massachusetts, five families with untold power formed a covenant of silence. One family, lusting for more, was banished; their bloodline disappearing without a trace--until now. the Sons of Ipswich, four young students at the elite Spencer Academy who are bound by their sacred ancestry. As descendants of the original families who settled in Ipswich Colony in the 1600's, the boys have all been born with special powers. When the body of a dead student is discovered after a party, secrets begin to unravel which threaten to break the covenant of silence that has protected their families for hundreds of years.

Now Years later after Caleb Danvers destroyed Chase Collins a moment of Peace fell in the small colony of Massachusetts, but unknown to him new members of The Covenant have risen in the lagest city in Amereica, New York City, but some have gone down different paths. Some have joined together to form the Zxpromethieus. This group has one thing on there minds...destroy any and all who have tampered with there familys and there powers, and yet another group named The Atlas has formedto Bring peace between The Covenants and others who can't handel their power.

The two groups are now in war with eachother.The Zxpromethieus leader is a man named Nails Darkheart, the first son of the geeatest Covenant member,Max Darkheart. Then theres the leader of The Atlas Rex Darkheart the second sone of Max. Max gave his power to Rex knowing his two sons would fight one day. He felt he could trust Rex with his power. The two groups are more dangeruse now then ever..becasue each group has found a way to use their power with out aging

[KH2_FinalSora]

Exactly. That helps so much. It makes it a little easier to comprehend. Now, for a name...

Ipswich Revival

mm...

Zxpromethieus

Zxpromethieus Ipswich

[Frogs557]

Zxpromethieus? how do you pronounce that lol?

[Rex]

Exactly. That helps so much. It makes it a little easier to comprehend. Now, for a name...

Ipswich Revival

mm...

Zxpromethieus

Zxpromethieus Ipswich
I was thinking The Covenant II: War Path.....that what I got

[KH2_FinalSora]

Eh, I dunno. Not my choice. I might join it...probably not though, I got to much to do.

[Rex]

Eh, I dunno. Not my choice. I might join it...probably not though, I got to much to do.

It dose look plan....I do like your idea though Ipswich Revival

and Frogs557...I have no idea how to say it...the name popped into my head

[Frogs557]

sounds cool. i might join. Also, i forgot to ask you. how did your wifes birthday go?

[Rex]

sounds cool. i might join. Also, i forgot to ask you. how did your wifes birthday go?

Relly well actualy.

[KH2_FinalSora]

Okay, another thing, I really hope you don't Rp like you're talking now. Cause...honestly...

I hate to be mean, but honestly, your grammar sucks. I'll help if I can, but time, unlike all of my characters, is not on my side.

[Rex]

Okay, another thing, I really hope you don't Rp like you're talking now. Cause...honestly...

I hate to be mean, but honestly, your grammar sucks. I'll help if I can, but time, unlike all of my characters, is not on my side.

I don't. Now that the name is out of the way...what about the opening and the charater sheet?

[KH2_FinalSora]

Opening? Hmm.........................I dunno....

As for a charry sheet, try this

Charater sheet:

Username:

Name:
Gender:
Age:
Bio:
Powers (max 5): (Please be descriptive)
Weapons: (Please be descriptive. Also, if you don't put it here, you don't have it))
Side: (Either The Zxpromethieus or The Atlas)
Personality:

Appearance:
Height:
Weight:
Eye:
Hair Color/Style:
Distinguishing Marks:
Bad Habits:
Greatest Flaw:
Best Quality:


mm....I forget anything important?

[VenFan]

Openings aren't really crucial for a successful RPG, nor are they even nessecary.

[Rex]

Opening? Hmm.........................I dunno....

As for a charry sheet, try this

Charater sheet:

Username:

Name:
Gender:
Age:
Bio:
Powers (max 5): (Please be descriptive)
Weapons: (Please be descriptive. Also, if you don't put it here, you don't have it))
Side: (Either The Zxpromethieus or The Atlas)
Personality:

Appearance:
Height:
Weight:
Eye:
Hair Color/Style:
Distinguishing Marks:
Bad Habits:
Greatest Flaw:
Best Quality:


mm....I forget anything important?

I like it....but can I use the

Height:
Weight:
Eye:
Hair Color/Style:
Distinguishing Marks:
for the people who can't find a photo of there character?

[KH2_FinalSora]

Yeah, pretty much. That's what it's there for.

[TwilightPrince]

this looks cool it sounds like a good story

[Rex]

so this is how the RPG will look

In 1692, in the Ipswich Colony of Massachusetts, five families with untold power formed a covenant of silence. One family, lusting for more, was banished; their bloodline disappearing without a trace--until now. The Sons of Ipswich, four young students at the elite Spencer Academy who are bound by their sacred ancestry. As descendants of the original families who settled in Ipswich Colony in the 1600's, the boys have all been born with special powers. When the body of a dead student is discovered after a party, secrets begin to unravel which threaten to break the covenant of silence that has protected their families for hundreds of years.

Now Years later after Caleb Danvers destroyed Chase Collins a moment of Peace fell in the small colony of Massachusetts, but unknown to him new members of The Covenant have raised in the largest city in America, New York City, but some have gone down different paths. Some have joined together to form the Zxpromethieus. This group has one thing on their minds...destroy any and all who have tampered with their families and their powers, and yet another group named The Atlas has formed to bring peace between The Covenants and others who can't handle their power.

The two groups are now in war with eachother.The Zxpromethieus leader is a man named Nails Darkheart, the first son of the greatest Covenant member, Max Darkheart. Then there’s the leader of The Atlas Rex Darkheart the second son of Max. Max gave his power to Rex knowing his two sons would fight one day. He felt he could trust Rex with his power. The two groups are more dangerous now than ever...because each group has found a way to use their power without aging

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charater sheet:
Username:
Name:
Gender:
Age:
Bio:
Powers (max 5): (Please be descriptive)
Weapons: (Please be descriptive. Also, if you don't put it here, you don't have it))
Side: (Either The Zxpromethieus or The Atlas)
Personality:
Bad Habits:
Greatest Flaw:
Best Quality:
Appearance:



For people who can't find a photo from your character
Height:
Weight:
Eye:
Hair Color/Style:
Distinguishing Marks:
------------------------------------------------------------------------
Rules:
1.Keep this at a rating of PG13 or less.
2.Let everyone have their moment.
3.Your not allowed to kill a character unless your premeted by the user of the character you wanna kill.
4.Respect other players.
5.no spamming
6.no god-modding
7. have fun.
8. No other Darkhearts!!!
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Opening:
QeorTQCJkhs

[TwilightPrince]

looks good to bad you cant accept yourself and put it up

[KH2_FinalSora]

It really doesn't need the opening thing.

[Rex]

you really think so?

[KH2_FinalSora]

Yeah. It's got enough already. Besides, I don't think the graders really need the video. It takes up time to load and watch, so it'll annoy them some.

[Rex]

Yeah. It's got enough already. Besides, I don't think the graders really need the video. It takes up time to load and watch, so it'll annoy them some.

ok I'll take it off.

[Rex]

it got accepted..thanks to eveyone. all your names will be in the RPG.