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4thkeybladeholder
03-15-2008, 12:26 AM
Asking For Your Acceptance,
I Try To Make You Give Me A Glance.
Afraid To Ask, Afraid To Believe.
For This Task, It Is Hard To Conceive.

I Wait For You To Look,
Though I Stay Hidden Behind My Book.
I Watch You, Trying To Decide...
Could I Find A Cue, Could I Confide?

Feeling Of Heat Washes Up My Cheeks,
For I Saw Her, And Now She Speaks,
Smiling In My Direction.
What Is She, But Pure Perfection?

Attempting To Forget Is No Easy Feat,
And Every Time I Only Get Beat.
Feelings So Strong,
How Have They Gotten So Wrong?

Suprising Me So, With Emotions So Low.
I Only Wish I Could Find It, If Only Bit By Bit.
The Alledged Right Or Wrong,
Where My Choice Might Belong.

After So Many Questions,
I Am Left With No Suggestions.
I Have Nothing To Go On,
And A Ledge I Am Now Upon.

To Jump Means Uncertain Death,
To Stay Means To Stop And Catch My Breath.
What If I Take Such A Chance?
Will I Be Back At My Normal Trance?

The Choice Is Still Unclear,
But One Thing Has Filled My Ear.
One Answer Has Finally Been Fulfilled,
For Now I See That These Feelings Will Never Be Killed.


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A rough draft of a recent poem I made...
Comments?
(I know the title is horrible... Asking? Seriously? Had no other ideas for a title... xD)

cbchick
03-15-2008, 01:45 AM
its sweet. i like it.

4thkeybladeholder
03-15-2008, 04:38 PM
Thanks CB.
It's only a rough draft though...
The flow of it is dreadful. xD

cbchick
03-15-2008, 05:01 PM
lolz its still nice tho.

4thkeybladeholder
04-28-2008, 11:53 PM
I... Uh, wanted people to know something.

This poem? It got chosen to be in the Newspaper. =o

Chaser's Apprentice
04-28-2008, 11:54 PM
=OO, Oh...Em...Gee! *Hugg* ^//^; Tis SOO good. Lol. =33, Luvv the title too.
'<LUV DANNY NORIEGA AND THE HOUSE TEAM>'

NicoleChristine
04-29-2008, 12:00 AM
Ohh I like it.
It's pretty sweet, made me smile actually. o.-

Sora The Hero
04-29-2008, 12:01 AM
it brought a tear to my eye.

4thkeybladeholder
04-29-2008, 12:08 AM
It completely astounded me that they were interested in my writing. I don't really believe I'm that good, but obviously they saw something in this piece.

NicoleChristine
04-29-2008, 12:17 AM
Well i like it. Der der der.
So it must be good. ;3