Love no more

[Roxas_Roxi]

This isn't much of a story or a poem, but I did this when I was bored. You can kinda say it's a story of how I know hate my second ex-boyfriend. Not an online bf, a real bf who is a **** to me! But we're friends now but please rate and comment this. Thanks! *Wink*

The las petal on the rose has fallen! Our love is no more. The last drop of blood has fallen from my wound. I place my sword by my side, only to signal that I'm done with this fight. Blood drips from the tip of my sword to the pool of blood that I'm standing in. The blood that I'm standing in is the blood from all our fights and our battles.

My cuts, scars, and wounds are from this last battle we just finished. I can still remember, the first dance I saw you come up to me and we started to dance. One more night, I just want to be with you. I want to hold you tight, it feels so right...tonight. Why can't true love last forever? I can't sleep without thinking about you. Your sword is still raised towards me. You look down at the bloody me.

Blood runs from the side of my lips, down to my neck. My scars burn as my tears fall onto them. They start to bleed once more. Blood flows down my face, my arms, and my legs. My eyes turn dull red and my sword falls from my hand only to land on the ground in the blood under my feet. I close my eyes and start to fall to the ground. You just stood and watched me fall into the pool of blood. Now your sword is at your side and you don't care about me anymore. You turn away from me.

[cbchick]

i like it. it catches my attention.

[Roxas_Roxi]

Thank you. I wrote this myself.

[cbchick]

its very good.

[Roxas_Roxi]

Thanks. I was sad that he broke up with me on the week I wasn't at school. And then on Saturday, he started to flirt with another girl, who was my best friend!
Anyway, on a scale of 1-100, what do you pick?

[cbchick]

hmm maybe 85 or 86.

and i would hate that. to see ur ex bf flirt with ur best friend. she would've heard some words from me >.>

[Roxas_Roxi]

What was your favorite part(s) in the whole thing?

And yeah. I was planning on not talking to him until he came up to me and asked if we can still be friends and i said yeah. Now, he thinks I'm flirting with him!

[cbchick]

i would say the second part.

[Roxas_Roxi]

I like that part too. The whole point of this is to say, 'Boys, if you have girlfiriends, don't dump them when they're not at school the whole week and don't flirt with other girls on a very special day that she missed. Especially if it's their best friend.'
That's what I think it says to me.

[cbchick]

yea same for me too.

[Roxas_Roxi]

I'm writting more right now so, yeah. What do you think could be improved in this? Tell me everything. lol

[cbchick]

hmm u kno..really nothing. i like the whole concept of the story so i say to jus continue with the way ur writing it.

[Axel_Fire_Wheel]

This isn't much of a story or a poem, but I did this when I was bored. You can kinda say it's a story of how I know hate my second ex-boyfriend. Not an online bf, a real bf who is a **** to me! But we're friends now but please rate and comment this. Thanks! *Wink*

The las petal on the rose has fallen! Our love is no more. The last drop of blood has fallen from my wound. I place my sword by my side, only to signal that I'm done with this fight. Blood drips from the tip of my sword to the pool of blood that I'm standing in. The blood that I'm standing in is the blood from all our fights and our battles.

My cuts, scars, and wounds are from this last battle we just finished. I can still remember, the first dance I saw you come up to me and we started to dance. One more night, I just want to be with you. I want to hold you tight, it feels so right...tonight. Why can't true love last forever? I can't sleep without thinking about you. Your sword is still raised towards me. You look down at the bloody me.

Blood runs from the side of my lips, down to my neck. My scars burn as my tears fall onto them. They start to bleed once more. Blood flows down my face, my arms, and my legs. My eyes turn dull red and my sword falls from my hand only to land on the ground in the blood under my feet. I close my eyes and start to fall to the ground. You just stood and watched me fall into the pool of blood. Now your sword is at your side and you don't care about me anymore. You turn away from me.
great,

[Roxas_Roxi]

Thank you. I'm adding more to it right now, so there will be more to read of it.

[Naminette]

Lovelez this! It's so deep

[Roxas_Roxi]

Thank you. I enjoy writting this for you all to read it. I'm adding more so give me some time and I'll add the rest for you. I base my stories after the anime show, Blood+. So, this is how I based this. Please, don't stop reading this if you read this line. I like to base my stories after the show and I enjoy to write different story lines about it. this is one of them. So, here's some more of it.

Ilay on the ground, covered in blood from head to toe. The sun starts to set down on me. My eyes are closed.

Soon, I awake to find myself not laying in blood, but on normal ground.

I look to my right to see a man in a white tux and wearing white pants. He tells me to fight.

My eyes go wide as I remember my past. Also, my eyes go back to being red again. A singal tear falls down my face. My name is Saya and this is all true.

[Naminette]

So entertwining. I love it! Do you think I should post my KH/ InuYasha fanfic here? You really inspired me. :D

[Roxas_Roxi]

You can make your own thread and post it on your own thread of it. I'll be the first to read it. :D ;) :p

He hands me my sword. I take it from him his hand. I start to stand up once more.

The man puts his hands on my shoulders. He tells me to rest. I shook my head. "No." I said to him. "Saya,"

I looked up. "Tell me, did you save me?" I asked him. He nodded yes. He told me his name. It was Haji. I soon realized that he wasn't wearing white, but black.

[Naminette]

OMG more please! *clasps hand*

[4thkeybladeholder]

Interesting... Extremely so.
The introduction is oddly put together... But I like it. It kept me reading... I like the imagery.
Keep it up.

[jaschris01]

nice