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Cristo
04-06-2008, 03:59 AM
In my dreams there is a land
Of beauty beyond imagination
In my dreams, I see the grand
Superb mental creation
It is so captivating that I'm always hesitating
To wake up...

In my dreams, there is no war
It's positively mystic
In my dreams, life means more
Than just a mere statistic
It is so productive that I'm always reluctant
To wake up...

In my dreams, future and history
Unfold right before my eyes
In my dreams, there is no mystery
There's no fear in Paradise
And I feel so elated that I absolutely hate it
To wake up...

In real life, there's always terror
Always sickness, war, and death
Always consequence to error
Loss of mind and labored breath
And I could count my blessings but it's getting more depressing
To wake up...

Dreams are so much better, it seems
That's the way I feel
But I can't live in my dreams
I've got to make my fantasies real
So now when I see the night I look forward to the light
To wake up...

To wake up.

Cristo
04-07-2008, 07:36 PM
bump

Tidus Shuyin
04-07-2008, 07:38 PM
Cool job!

FinalSora13
04-07-2008, 08:14 PM
Cool.Keep up the good work!!!

Jess
04-09-2008, 02:11 PM
In my dreams there is a land
Of beauty beyond imagination
In my dreams, I see the grand
Superb mental creation
It is so captivating that I'm always hesitating
To wake up...

In my dreams, there is no war
It's positively mystic
In my dreams, life means more
Than just a mere statistic
It is so productive that I'm always reluctant
To wake up...

In my dreams, future and history
Unfold right before my eyes
In my dreams, there is no mystery
There's no fear in Paradise
And I feel so elated that I absolutely hate it
To wake up...

In real life, there's always terror
Always sickness, war, and death
Always consequence to error
Loss of mind and labored breath
And I could count my blessings but it's getting more depressing
To wake up...

Dreams are so much better, it seems
That's the way I feel
But I can't live in my dreams
I've got to make my fantasies real
So now when I see the night I look forward to the light
To wake up...

To wake up.

nice C&C everyone >.>

Okay this is really nice. I like the repeatition of, "To wake up...", it just like, makes it all work. It's quite a sad poem, but the beat it good, a good use of syllables and junk.
I can't really think of ways to improve it. ^^

Goooooood job C: