4th's Corner

[4thkeybladeholder]

LOL.

In my school newspaper, my History Teacher leads it and she saw me writing some poems. And, she said she wanted me to take part in the paper with my own spot, called 'Cody's Corner'

I find this COMPLETELY hilarious. And... Kinda kewl. xD

Anyways.

I decided I'll make a place for the poems I make, cuz I'd love some C&C and NOT have to make a thread everytime.



So... To begin.


With Slight Breezes Beginning Distant Waves,
They Become Summer Winds With Time,
Given Heat That Never Behaves.
The Wind Travels And Touches A Chime,
Sounding Brittle Sounds That Are Both Tranquil And Clear...
And The Summer Wind Blows, And The Cold Starts It's Rest.


That's all I got on that one. I'd like some C&C for it and some ideas on how to resume it. Pleash.

[Helix: The True Hero]

Doing a bit better with rhyme, but still not totally great. You could also try going with separating stanzas (of course you know what that is...)

a
a
a
a

b
b
b
b

There's also something called rhyme scheme that's great for poems and such...*Goes to check for definition on wikipedia*

*Comes back*

A rhyme scheme is the pattern of rhyming lines in a poem or song. It is usually referred to by using letters to indicate which lines rhyme. In other words, it is the pattern of end rhymes.

For example "A,B,A,B," indicates a four-line stanza in which the first and third lines rhyme, as do the second and fourth. Here is an example of this rhyme scheme from To Anthea, Who May Command Him Any Thing by Robert Herrick:

Bid me to weep, and I will weep, "A"
While I have eyes to see; "B"
And having none, and yet I will keep "A"
A heart to weep for thee. "B"

[4thkeybladeholder]

lol, I know what a rhyme scheme is. ;P

And yes, I normally seperate into stanzas now and again, but that poem is more of a rough draft. I worked on it for about 1 minute in history.

What I got here is a simple change from..
A
B
A
B
and so on. I used to do this all the time, but I stopped when I went from AA BB and all that.

When I make up Raps now and then I usually use a stanza completely for with one rhyming end, using the rhyme scheme A A A A and then switching to B.

[Helix: The True Hero]

Oh, so you do raps now? XD

You could also use something called "rhyme within the line," which uses rhyming....within the line!

Ex.)

And yet we sing, without such a ring
that dawn shall cometh fourth once more... (My own example, by the way :P)

Using this method is usually pretty effective.

[4thkeybladeholder]

Oh yesh. Yesh I do.

Well, I do that as well, but I usually use it differently. It's the same concept, one line with two rhymes, but its like...

A... B...
A... B...

If that makes sense. xD

It's not the same as using a rhyme within the line twice. Though both bring more beauty to the poem in itself.

[Helix: The True Hero]

The way you just did it was no different from my example. It just repeats itself in the scheme of the rhyme, lol.

Tell me: Do you usually create poetry based on specific things? (Emotions, objects, people...?)

[4thkeybladeholder]

I write what comes to mind. Sometimes it might be a totally abstract thing that may or may not be about any specific thing, but that happens when I'm just writing to be writing...

Most of the time, if something catches my eye that I admire, I will on more than one occasion write about it.

[Helix: The True Hero]

*Coughs* Interesting...me be the same way.

So, are there any kind of questions you need to know about poetic literature for your corner? Or are you set?

[4thkeybladeholder]

Oh Mighty Writer Of Poetry, I need not know anymore for now...

...XD

lol, I'm good. Thanks Helix. It's a help. I'll post up some new work soon.

[Helix: The True Hero]

*Dusts off hands and walks away whistling*

Can't wait to read more of your "work."