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4thkeybladeholder
06-18-2008, 01:35 AM
Intro:
Why is the sky so dark today?
And how come that man took all that money?
What happened to the dog?
Why are you crying?
Why?

Verse one:

It all happened so fast; the past I hide is oh so vast,
It takes me by surprise, the tears flowing down my eyes,
Remembering the day’s Dad wasn’t so wise, and the dog just up and dies.
Mom was trying to say her goodbyes,
And Dad was trying so hard to come up with lies.
My rhymes are starting this game of chess,
My rooks are nothing but a mess,
That’s what I get when I stress.
It’s all behind me now, I guess.

Chorus:
The Past is the past, now there’s a new cast,
Unsurpassed till I’m surpassed,
At long last I can get past,
All I got to do is hold fast.
(Repeat 1x)

Verse two:
But now I’m standing here aghast,
I can’t believe others are still harassed,
For what was none of their business,
This is just taking too much of what I possess,
What could possibly work with success?
Nonetheless, I’m not trying to impress,
These people keep trying to find my new address,
So why would I draw attention to myself in contests?
Everyone around me is in distress,
What their problems suggest is just what the guy suspects
It’ll take more than I am,
To make this work for them,
But now I know at least I passed my own exam,
So now I figured out that,

Chorus:
The Past is the past, now there’s a new cast,
Unsurpassed till I’m surpassed,
At long last I can get past,
All I got to do is hold fast.
(Repeat 1x)



Just trying something new.

Interesting, how it came out. Sorta feels like a rap, but... I dunno. xD

Wzrdto25
06-18-2008, 05:25 AM
I'm quite liking it. =)

The King of KH
06-18-2008, 06:26 AM
Nice!!.........

VenFan
06-18-2008, 07:15 AM
This is very moving. It's one of those songs that has a message to it, you know? A moral. This is a really cool song. I didn't see any spelling errors or punctuation errors in the song or anything, which is good. I really like this! Like, really!!

4thkeybladeholder
06-18-2008, 03:22 PM
Thanks, guys. Appreciate it.

cbchick
06-18-2008, 04:00 PM
yes i love it too.

4thkeybladeholder
06-18-2008, 04:46 PM
Awesome. Good to know. xD

I was thinking of adding another verse... But I don't know yet.

ForgottenMemory
06-18-2008, 04:53 PM
This reminds me of a Linkin Park song; it has the feel. Great job, 4th. That's alot of words that I know no one but you could really put together. :]

NicoleChristine
06-18-2008, 07:31 PM
Aww, it's good Cody. :]
I like it.

4thkeybladeholder
06-18-2008, 07:37 PM
Thanks, both of you.