Writing Team : My Girl

[The King of KH]

My emotion for Britt is vehement and she makes such an impact
Beautiful eyes and thats a fact. In style, fit and so phat
Not fat. Keep talking to this girl and you'll notice shes attractive
Funny stuff she talks about. Love the way shes been acting
No interruptions or distractions. Talking to her is my attraction
Shes my Islands of Adventure or Disney Land where i reside
Nothing can take her from my side. Nothing gon take me from her ride
I might be blind from her eyes. I have a good reason to run and hide
Ill always love her despite all the arguing and all the fights
And just like Rudy on the forums, shes my "Door to Light"
Nothing can put me on hiatus from her love. I love her to death
Feelings is what i want to express. I want to ride the "Britt express"
We never caught up in stress. Never about distraught and distress
Making the enemies less. According to her other boyfriends, im the best
Excel the rest. I ace any of her tests. I trust this girl, she so trustworthy
Shes worthy of being the best. And its not even early.
I have no limit talking to her. I will continue to show love
She be living in New Jersey so i sometimes look up above
Im Britts stud. I will always be Britts boyfriend and bud
This girl is something. Everyone on MSN adores my lady
She older than me but shes my girl and my beautiful baby
But i dont need to give her bibs or even pass and pacifier
I will continue to show love and inspire. She makes me aspire
She makes me fly to the gates in heaven. Forget the bottom fire
I will always be her boyfriend. As her man, i will never retire
All the other boyfriends are dead. Ancient, old and expired

[cbchick]

well of course i like it lol

[VenFan]

This rap is amazing (no surprise there). You're really one of the best rappers on the Forums, no joke! It's a really good rap. If you can add so much to this rap just describing your love for Britt, then you must really care for her, like, a bunch. I haven't seen any spelling errors in here yet, but I did notice that you've missed some punctuation marks. You've forgotten multiple apostrophes, like "I'll" or "she's" for example.

But the apostrophes aren't too big a problem, because the emotion and feeling put into this rap more than make up for it.

[The King of KH]

This rap is amazing (no surprise there). You're really one of the best rappers on the Forums, no joke! It's a really good rap. If you can add so much to this rap just describing your love for Britt, then you must really care for her, like, a bunch. I haven't seen any spelling errors in here yet, but I did notice that you've missed some punctuation marks. You've forgotten multiple apostrophes, like "I'll" or "she's" for example.

But the apostrophes aren't too big a problem, because the emotion and feeling put into this rap more than make up for it.

lol. I never pay attention the the punctuation.....lol

But thanks man.

[4thkeybladeholder]

Niceee. Awesome.
Good job.