Rap Thread 2

[Cristo]

I left the stand and reprimanded all the bought-off judges
Was made a martyr, played the part and stalled a lot of grudges
Now I'm in prison, rhyming, listenin' to adoration
No questions asked, best to bask in the admiration
And even if the seasons quit to sway in my liking
Tomorrow's for the sorrow...today is for writin'
I take a chance, forsake the glance of the many doubters
After my trial, laugh for a while, must begin without us
I can't be blamed and the flame will continue to grow
I take notes, a scapegoat's still their venue to show
Me as the enemy, see they still pretend to be saints
Until they drown in their lies, astounding surprise...but look who it taints.

Look who remains despite all of the hate, I still show up
I still blow up, but I had to stop and you know what?
It's time I stop showing off my skill so much
Cause they hate and I can't take it when I've built so much
And all of a sudden, everything around me crumbles
The sound is profound, it's an astounding rumble
And so my pain makes me stronger, I bite the bullet
My hat still has the rabbit and I'll fight to pull it
So this is my gift to you as I come out the victor
I'm still living proof of hope, there was times I was sick of
The injustice, but giving is better than receiving
And living is better than just breathing.

[VenFan]

No more Rap Threads. I believe the Mods banned Rap Threads some time ago for the behavior of some members and the context of their raps. If I'm mistaken, someone can re-open this. Until then, however, this'll remain closed.

[VenFan]

Alright, it's come to my understanding that Cristo will be the only person rapping in this thread, so what happened in the previous Rap Threads cannot happen in here. So, in that case, I'll re-open it.

Keep it clean.

[4thkeybladeholder]

Way to be formal. =D

Have fun. Interesting opening.

[Cristo]

The innocent cry every time the innocent die
And innocent lives lost, life's limit arrives
And you can't resurrect all the minutes that die
Best bet we're all losin', all your winnin's a lie
We even twist our memories to fit what we pretend to be
Lost sight of the inner me, friends turnin' to enemies
Happiness....the basis of whatever we're graspin next
Keep graspin' till we're near death gaspin in raspy breaths
I look at all the haters who can't stand my rhymes
Not all haters are external, it's who I am sometimes
And who I'd be if I could see someone who'd outshine me
I don't mean to brag...but no one here can outrhyme me
Hate makes my brain lag, we all know that doubt's grimy
And anybody doubtin' what I'm about...TRY ME
Because I'm me and I'll always be me
With a heart made of stone like the hallways B.C.
And I feel all alone like my papa was the same
Do it all till insane is the object of my game
I don't care if you diss, so, I'ma be clap-ping
My name is Cristo, but you can call me Rap King

[GSWarriors]

That was pretty good...

[Cristo]

Who cares if I fall? I'm prepared for it all
I don't close my eyes like I'm scared of the ball
I stare at it all, and the reason I fall
Ain't based on my words, man, my speeches enthrall
It's to learn how to pick myself up
Trust, I'm like Batman, I stitch myself up
And get right back to displayin' my will
But I don't keep it to myself, I'm a purveyor of skill
And I am praying you will become half the man that I am
They scam and laugh...I laugh back at the sham

Oh, no, not there again
The place where I look down on your ignorance and you call me arrogant

I don't want to judge, I'm not here for that
But your flow's transparent, it's the clearest crap
So, from now on, this is my resolution
I'm gonna be a man of action and get my restitution

[GSWarriors]

The first verse was real nice.


The second one was notsomuch


The third verse was pretty decent.

[Cristo]

Hip-hop symbolism, I'll be Hannibal
A cannibal of words, but the herbs call me animal
But then again, at least I'm the synonym of beast
A serial (cereal) killer like cinnamon and yeast
Infection like mass death, many men decrease
While you send them into war, I send them into peace
Beginning in the streets and it's ending with the beats
Where virtue is victory and sinning is defeat
It hurts when the memory's not plenty or replete
Of a time with no crime and innocence complete
I am, in a sense, complete yet still unfulfillable
Cause they either don't listen or nitpick one syllable
Wait...they don't listen AND nitpick one syllable
Flesh and blood can die, but an ideal's un-killable
The real's un-killable, the will's un-killable
You can hate all you want, but skill's un-killable
Skill's unbreakable, that's why they hatin' so
To open minds, my potent rhymes contain their favorite flow

[GSWarriors]

Good job man... you tore that up.

[Cristo]

I find the same people that were screamin' my name
Are now the same ones demeanin' my fame
I stay steamin, complain that their reasons are feigned
And these demons remain, this evil disdain
And, hey, even a sane man beaten this way can
Find anger eroding his conscience, exploding in noxious
Fumes that clear the room, his veneer is doomed
Along with his destiny, right now it's best to be
The peacemaker cause he's right on the brink
But he can't fight the heat, so he dives in the stink
Fightin' fire with fire, but he's the only one that gets burned
To the point where death is not avoided...it's yearned
And there's no doctors, no hospital, no burn wards
His spirit dies, but it's not the death he yearns for
And when it all ends, your false friends have left you
Is there no help for the widow's nephew?
Took a big step, but I couldn't do Step 2
It's grave but ain't gravy, one foot out and one foot in
Lookin' out, drinkin' death's stew, wishin' for sorrow's lift
I want to steal your breath too...but you'll just let me borrow it

[GSWarriors]

I see you got some deep meaning in yo rhymes... that's tight.

[Misuzu]

This is reminding me of when you and Omar would have those Rap competitions...

...The good ol' days...

[Cristo]

I am the best, ya'll just second-rate
Hatas wearin' no vest will face reckless fates
And you're scarin' no vet with flows less than great
Everything that I say is NO less than great
So you think that I'll sway when the wind blows harder?
Hate motivates me, I will then go farther
I won't bend so martyred is the way I break
And you can trust anyone when they say I'm great
I'm not just anyone, I am on a higher pedestal
Flow so sick, so of course, my lines are medical
Notes so thick you can't even find the decimal
I'm a pro so quit hatin', salty rhymes are edible
Faulty rhymes forgettable, I can't even remember
I am gifted as an artist and uncanny as a member

[GSWarriors]

*applauds*


That was your best one in this thread.

[Cristo]

All right, okay, so I've made my decision.

I'm the best rapper on the site. Obviously. And so I've decided I'm going to do a free(write)style. What I'm writing below is gonna be done in less than five minutes.

I'm starting at 7:58, here we go!

All right, here it is, fear the whiz
With the keyboard, see, Lord
I am the adored and the deplored
I'm the scorned and THE mourned
I was torn, now I'm reborn
Now I be more than what they tried to say I was
First I played too much and now I don't play enough
The display is rough but I stay in touch
Like an Asian monk with his third eye
Heard why? Reading this is like watching a bird fly
These turds cry 'cause I deserve my preferred sky
Like virtual reality, preserve the mentality
Murk the fallacies till they shirk the galaxy
There lurks morality...

Ughh...


Goodness forsakes for goodness sake, I display the mantra
"For your sake, do whatever it takes" that's why I pray the stanza

Ughh...

I'm a doctor, of course I'm gonna test your patience (patients)
I'm a king so you can call the Midwest a nation
I bless creation and digest translations of my best summations
Possessed, impatient, flows test frustration
Imitate Christ, that's why I detest temptation
What I write's for black and white, yeah, I impress dalmatians
If you say I'm not the best, ya hatin'
Placin' curses on me like you're obsessed with Satan
I might sing some, got that Kanye West sensation
Yeah, I bring fun, but I request location
Not age or sex narration, just to make sure that you're in my kingdom
Called the Milky Way, feel me pray, you'll be prayin' next for rations

Ughh...

8:02

[Chaser's Apprentice]

lol YAYYY (:
they're nice.

[GSWarriors]

It was decent... not your best work though.

[Cristo]

You guys get two today. That was just trying to see how fast I could write, but I'll put some time into the next one. :)

[GSWarriors]

You guys get two today. That was just trying to see how fast I could write, but I'll put some time into the next one. :)
Cool.... do you do these on the fly?

[Cristo]

Cool.... do you do these on the fly?

Yeah, whenever I get in the mood. It's kind of a pastime.

[GSWarriors]

Yeah, whenever I get in the mood. It's kind of a pastime.
Cool... you ever been in a battle?

[cbchick]

Cool... you ever been in a battle?

oh he's been in many -_-'

[Cristo]

Sorry about being late. Got kinda busy. :)

I'm an ace in the game like cards
That's why erasin' my fame's so hard
You can try all you want, you can cry, you can front
I'm escapin' the blame, no scars

I'm a king from the minute I started
It's like spring, what's diminished is lauded
And the weather is fine, almost every time
That I bring to a finish uncharted

Territory like I've found a treasure
Every story is like pounds I've measured
Like I've laid siege and was then made liege
But instead of war, I surround with pleasure

Every bar will make you flyer
Like a star, I take you higher
And I'm not lyin', 'cause I'm a lion
And I say RAWR to snakes and liars

Then they wanna get the man involved
Gun in his hand while he standin' tall
I've committed many murders, if this goes any further
I will start drawin' up my plans to maul

What's the story in bein' a beast
When his only glory is to see him deceased?
You need to organize thought, explore what you're taught
Then study quarry like Bereans* or priests

So keep wishin' that your dreams ring true
I'm the physician when you're bee-sting blue**
With million-dollar dreams instilled in your teens
And no ambition to see things through

*The Bereans are people in the New Testament who were famous for studying and seeing whether things were true or not

**When people get stung by bees who are allergic, their skin turns blue as part of anaphylactic shock. This is called cyanosis.

[GSWarriors]

good job man... you're really talented.

[Cristo]

All right, I'm taking requests. Name a rap song and I'll try to write a verse that flows with the beat. :)

[GSWarriors]

ok man I love this beat, try to make something off of this.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iafAoR1vPVM



If you can't work with that beat, tell me and I'll hit you up with another one.

[Cristo]

I stand on the world, one foot on the US
Began as a nerd, you do good what I do best
Demandin' your word when the hood is what you rep
Can't stand all the herbs, 'cause I stood it to death
Came back to life and dropped holy like Jesus
Got your crew and your wife screamin' boldly they need us
And I say what's right so coldly it freezes
Easily hold the mic, they're so slow it dis eases :)

[Cristo]

Any more suggestions? :)

[GSWarriors]

Good job, the beat flowed with your rhymes. It could have been a little better but overall that was good.


I'll hit you up with another suggestion tomorrow.

[Cristo]

I don't want to live with the polar bears
The atmosphere is so much colder there
And it's hot inside my head from how fast I built me
My engine is still warm, the contrast might kill me
I appreciate the warmth when it's chili (chilly)
But the price is too cold, warms my soul then it bills me
Might as well say it hurts my soul just to be me
Just like Lupe, except I'm not on a CD
It's a new day, the old one was a freebie
Funny how we make pain look so easy
Money's how we rate gain, crooks so sleazy
Take advantage of a system built for the hateful
Where your slavemaster's the enemy you pray for
So say a prayer and drop the issue
And if you despair, just cop a tissue
Give Kleenex the money to fund a new commercial
In between the lies of the media that hurts you
Suicide, third leading cause of death
Among teens despising oxygen, preferring loss of breath
Makes me wonder if there's any hope
For all the people who can't cope
All the people left defenseless, six inches from a rope
Or from a gun or from the razor right next to the soap
If you wanna kill yourself, perseverance is the best method
Best to die trying to win, passing out from the effort
Push yourself 'cause you're behind and it's dire
Keep goin' till your knees buckle and your mind is on fire
Keep going for the pain, prove to the world you're selfless
They can call you insane, but they won't call you helpless
Anything you want to accomplish, any goal, any dream
Don't let circumstance stop this, any soul, ANYTHING
Reach out for knowledge, grab it like you'll hold it forever
And don't lose your integrity, for worse or for better
Some people want to hate, if they can then they will fear instill
But you control your fate so keep your hands on the steering wheel
Don't let life change you, you've got to change life
Some things ain't true and some things ain't right
But you don't have to be one of them
So they can say you're losin', but you've really just begun to win ;)

[GSWarriors]

Wow man that was really deep. That had great flow with it and I liked it. Keep up the good work. : )

[Cristo]

I'm posting an old one of mine in this thread now that I'm actually getting reviews. :D

Automatic suspension fought the addict's retention
Bought a bag of ascension, caught the static dimension
He's a tad ticked with tension so he's flying above
He feels okay on the silver-gray lining of love
Can't feel the pain so he still remains high as a dove
And, in his brain, he transcends the strained hiatus of
The people that stress him, test, and depress him
Unpleasant, yes, but he's the best, they're just peasants
He shone on his throne with a crown of gold
With no cost, he was lost but now he found his soul
With a resounding goal he swears to never rise
Above the limits of his fantasy, never cries, forever skies
But in a minute he'll come back to the dust from whence he came
And he'll swear to not do what's accustomed since ashamed
But, as soon as tragedy strikes, he's back to the pipe
To end the tears, he spends his years laughing at life
And he won't cry when the high takes an ugly turn
It's fire THEN expire....though it's a lovely burn
First-timer can't see clearly like Cyclops
Sure, the body may go on...but life stops

[GSWarriors]

I see you like deep rhymes. That's really good. But if you want serious reviews you should also take your work somewhere else. I mean I'm the only one commenting on your work, I'd be mad if there was only one person reviewing my hard work, ya know?

[Cristo]

My treasure's in heaven, a spiritual Range Rover
My rhymes are so hard my lyrics mean "Game Over"
No one on the corner's got swagger but me
Got a crocodile tooth, now my dagger's Dundee
And I ain't even playing, game ended a bar ago
Movie of my life always destined to star a pro
I do this for the heck of it, wreckin' this
Flow so cold that it feels like it's Breckenridge
Ice so cold that it feels like a freezer
Shakin' so hard that it looks like a seizure
People askin' me why I'm never a crowd pleaser
'Cause I'm allergic to lies plus I'm a loud sneezer
Watch out though, they try to martyr me
But even if I go, you can't kill the artistry

"Keep your friends at a distance and your enemies close
Cause the folks you call friends finna envy the most"
I didn't write that line, it isn't in me to boast
Hope I don't make new enemies when friends see my posts

[GSWarriors]

"Flow so cold that it feels like it's Breckenridge"

What does that last word mean?


"People askin' me why I'm never a crowd pleaser
'Cause I'm allergic to lies plus I'm a loud sneezer"


Those lines were weak.... other than that it was great.

[Cristo]

"Flow so cold that it feels like it's Breckenridge"

What does that last word mean?


"People askin' me why I'm never a crowd pleaser
'Cause I'm allergic to lies plus I'm a loud sneezer"


Those lines were weak.... other than that it was great.

Breckenridge is a place known for its cold weather in Colorado.

And that last line basically means that people don't like me because I refute lies adamantly.

[GSWarriors]

Breckenridge is a place known for its cold weather in Colorado.

And that last line basically means that people don't like me because I refute lies adamantly.
oh ok thanks for clearing that up, you're pretty talented.

[Cristo]

The knight crossed the bridge
Though the fires below pressured him to turn back
He spurned that 'cause the loss was big
If he couldn't take the heat, then he couldn't stand the cost of it
A learned fact through the people that had failed
As evil had prevailed, the prevalence affectin' him
By leaving him in hell and, as well, he took his first step to life
And first step to death 'cause hearse lay at right
And worst lay at left, he's cursed, say the rest
But first, let him fight...the story's not over
Valor is not safe and glory's not kosher
And soldiers...never want to be self-sparing
You're gonna see help's daring
Especially compared to the great and the blind
Ambition's a disease when there's hate on your mind
That's another fact that is veiled but let's get back to the tale
And we'll see whether taking his time
Slowly walking up the steps shows his prep
And power or cowardice or something we lost in
The fight to be right, and that something is caution
As he's making his climb, it gets steadily steeper
So he's taking his time, it don't get any cheaper
He makes it to the top, breathes a sigh of relief
Sees the corpses strewn up cursed to die in their grief
Exhaustion sets in, but can't let laggin' begin
To fight the dragon without, must fight the dragon within
Some people are made fools by the rules
Forced to duel with their personality, it's called a "dual" personality
Sacrifice their principles to win
A masterpiece tainted with the intervals of sin
Losin' what they were fightin' for, the knight knows
He didn't come to fight himself, he came to fight foes
Now was time for the fight of man and beast
So he faced the fire and cast away his fear
He never strayed, adhered though he was planned a feast
For the monster, but on the contrary he would stand at least

But we have an advantage
We know he can't manage
Because he only holds the past
He doesn't know the future
So even going fast he can't see someone can shoot ya
In the back and send you back
Make all of it for nothing
He was falling for the loving
His trusty sword had rust ignored
Plus he didn't see the end of the "tale/tail"
When it hit him, we all know where it sent him

Now he's standing at the bridge, scared to cross it
Remainin' intact is despair's composite
So will he decide to stop and just fail
Or do it all again...just to chop off its tail?

[Cristo]

When you attack and then fail, no gain in a fight
Now you're blackin' out as well cause it rained on your pride
Got a knack for the ailments of pain and you slide
Into stackin' your failures, deranged, you decide
That the facts are that hell would be painless besides
There's no lack to the swell, what remains are the cries
Of the pack that had yelled with disdain in their eyes
Can't react or rebel so you made a disguise

And they're not satisfied, but then they never are
Unless you show that inside you are forever marred
And all combat has died, they have leveled a star
To wear a gat is right, but to be clever's bizarre

So I'm standin' on the balcony, looking at the ground below
And I can't get it out of me, I'm shook but I'm not shouting though
The man that I'm about to be, even crooks can't doubt my flow
I expand the route I see and then I took the route I know

[GSWarriors]

I gotta say... that last one was probs your best one in this thread.