My (Probably Stupid) KH Spoof

[jamjarmaster]

Ok, so I was really really bored so this came to me. I don't think I'm funny, so I need tips. This is written in play form, I find it easier.
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The scene is set on the Destiny Islands. Sora and Kairi are on the beach in a sunny afternoon

SORA: And I was like, dude, you know?
KAIRI: Totally.
SORA: But he like kept goin' and I was like, dude, not cool. And he was like, what's not cool and I was like, you, man.
KAIRI: Totally.
The conversation continues for a minute. Then Riku comes.
RIKU: Life sucks.
SORA: Who are you, man?
KAIRI: Totally.
RIKU: Life sucks. Darkness is all dark, and light is light, making me depressed.
SORA: Dude, are you emo, like?
RIKU: I don't want to talk to you.
KAIRI: Totally.
SORA: Ok, dude. Go do whatever man. I'm takin' a nap.
KAIRI: Totally.
RIKU: I'll go, you stupid hippie.
Riku throws a stone at Sora and leaves.
SORA: Ow! Not cool man.
KAIRI: Totally.
At Disney Castle, Donald and Goofy enter.
DONALD: Gahhh!
Goofy: Huhh?
They have an arguement in their weird Disney language. Back at the Destiny Islands, darkness desends...
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Should I continue with this or make a serious story?

[ZombiGirl]

Seeing as no-one else has commented...

Hrmm...I wouldn't particularly like to read a fanfic in play form...kind of boring.
If you could transfer it into story for, it might be a little more interesting.
It's not bad; it made me laugh aloud at one point :D

It's just that the 'riku is a big emo' thing has been done before. I'd suggest you do continue with this, and see how you can innovate beyond the standard spoof stuff.

Hey, even if you want to keep it in script, it could make a nice video ^^