fanfic-kingdom hearts 3 return of the orgiasition.

[khfan12345]

This is my fanfic of kingdom hearts, please enjoy and if anything I need to improve on just tell me. This is my seconed fanfic so don’t get mad if I mest up on anything k.

``Sora what are you doing asked Kiari? Nothing its just theres something in the water, well go pick it up then Sora. Sora gos to the beach and picks it up, so what is it Sora? it’s a note from mickey. What does it say Riku asked? The note- Well Sora, Riku and Kiari we need your help, somehow the organization came back. I think the knights might of made them come back but anyways in the morning get on your gummi ship and come to twight town and Kiari just to tell ya your going to be a keyblade weider so when you get here you will get a keyblade. Before I go I want to say goofy, Donald are k well bye. Sora runs into the cave and starts hitting the wall. Kiari asked why are you punching the wall? Because I don’t want to go on another adventure. Well im a weider now so all 3 of us can kick but! I know and we get to see goofy and Donald again so that’s good. Well we better get to bed Sora told them. The next morning they woke up and went on the gummi ship well do you still know how to drive it ask Riku? Yep I know how to.
How did you like this chapter.

[final fantasy 12]

It was okay if this is Namuros ideal but ...

[khfan12345]

but what> do i need to inprove?

[sora=roxas]

It's good. but it needs to be longer.

[Namine]

It's good.:)

[K H P]

Needs more detail, and if you're writing for the character, you really have to tap into the character, and yep way more deatail

other than that i enjoyed reading it, i like stories, continue?

[Roxas88]

Its okay i guess.....but like those people said, put more detail about whats going on, and kinda use the personality of the characters. You know what i mean?

[khfan12345]

thanks guys, i will make it longer and the next chapter will be comeing up soon!!!