Deaths Angel's story

[Shadow in the shadow]

(Im not woried about grammer and all of that. I will be puting this into diffrent periods of his life. Any thing he speaks is in a diffrent language only translated to English)

Along time ago before memory and time, before this world and space there was a creature. It was a form of human only darker, stanger, stronger.

It floated along having nothing to do untill the Creator made every thing. The Creator sent the creature to earth to have the creature watch over the world. Hundreds of years passed before it was noticed and by that time it had gave it self a name. Deaths Angel.

He began to wander the earth the day that he was placed there. He began to understand that he had powers to controll shadows and darkness. He could use it how he wished. He wondered to himself one day while he was playing with his magic as he called it if there were others like him. He had wondered this earth and seen only creatures of odd shapes and sizes. He had even taken one as a pet. A creature all covered in fur, with pionty ears, and when he had taken it he had seen it with a group of its kind. He had no name for it so he made one up. One that he felt fit the creatures way of moving in and out of sight with a slight movement. He called it Hidden Shadow. Soon afterwards he and his pet fell into a sleep deeper then anything he had ever fallen into.

A long time afterwards (seening as to it that he doesnt count days like how we do.) as he was walking along side Hidden he heard sounds. He ran towards the sounds (by now its about the middle ages) and crawled on his belly up the hill in front of him. He looked over the top of the hill and saw these creatures that he had never seen before. "Hidden what do you think these things are?" He said. Hidden just looked at him not shure really of what was being asked. "Im not shure I like these things what ever the are. Killing each other for some reason that I see may be the oddest thing ever." He left the fight and whent back to his cave to sleep again.

I will be posting more soon. Ill take any comments you give me. If you have an Idea post it ill lokk at it later.

[DestinyHolder]

Great story,its very good

[Shadow in the shadow]

Thanks. Hey do you have any pointers?

[Twilight Blade]

Use the character's name more often and be more descriptive of the surroundings.

[Shadow in the shadow]

Ya Im sorta moving him through time. I also dont whant him to have a name until this chapter.

Chapter2 A name and friendship.

The Creature woke felling a pressence in the room. He wasnt shure if it was friend or foe just that it was there. He opened his eyes and looked around. He saw on of the creatures frim earlier. He got out of his bed drwing on his powers of shadow and brought about two twin scimitars. He had decided that if they were going to enter his home (Cave) then he would defend it. He walked towards the being not shure what to do so he kicked it gently in the side. "Get out of my home." The creature looked up to him with eyes closeing from the lack of blood in its body. he then noticed that it was wounded and a female of the odd race that he had seen centurys before. He whent to the farthest end of the cave and found a floewer that he grew for beauty and for its cureing ability. He plucked one from the wall that it clunged to so desperatly. He ran back to were she was and said "Whats your name?" in a slurred english sentance. She looked up to him and began to faint. He pulled a petal from the flower and put it on her wound. She began to heal instanly. He picked her up and walked to the bed and put her down. He grabed the animal skin he used for a blanket and pulled it over her. Then he whent walking, looking for her kind or something that would suggested that they were coming back to get her. He called to his pet Hidden.

When she woke she noticed that she was in a bed. "Were am I? Who was that that was standing over me earlier?" She hears foot steps, and gets out of the bed to hide. That man was coming back. "Why did you do what you did?" She asked when he got inside the cave. "Huh. I speak langauge k. Not well. I found you hurt. Healling plant." He says as he points to the wall that he got the plant from. "Good so you understand English a little. I am Rana as my friends call me. Who are you?" She come out from her hiding corner as he places the deer he had on his shoulders down, and then started a fire. "Im not named. I call self Deaths Angel. Why show in cave?" (He learns fast so if it gets confusing sorry.) He begins to skin the deer with a knife of shadow. "Are you hungry?''

(Ill continue tomarrow.)

[Helix: The True Hero]

Is this the full chapter?

[Shadow in the shadow]

No its just that Im getting tired so I will be quiting soon. If you have any Ideas post them. I could use some ideas.

"No Im sorta of wondering why Im here and not with my goup of hunters. Whats today?" Rana asked. "I keep no date. I live day to day. Thats my life." Death said. "Why were you up here?" she asked. "I live here. I find no trace of you people. They left ye here to die. Think. What you do to get wound?" Death said as he began to cook the deer. "Hidden come here." He said to his pet. Hidden came to the cave and noticed her. He growled at her and walked carefuly into the cave. "Hey she friend not enemy. If you keep growling at her I wont feed you." He said to the pet as he casually tosed a piece of the deer to his pet. "You shure you not want food?" He asked her. "No. Well ya. Ill take some. Why do you have all those ald things like your clothing its like from the eighteenth century?" She asked and whent to the deer and picked off some of the meat. "I never keep up with time I have clothing like this cause I like it. It fit my personality tto well. I wonder how long Ive slept since I last was a wake."

[fallenxangel]

very nice keep updating!

[Shadow in the shadow]

No its just that Im getting tired so I will be quiting soon. If you have any Ideas post them. I could use some ideas.

"No Im sorta of wondering why Im here and not with my goup of hunters. Whats today?" Rana asked. "I keep no date. I live day to day. Thats my life." Death said. "Why were you up here?" she asked. "I live here. I find no trace of you people. They left ye here to die. Think. What you do to get wound?" Death said as he began to cook the deer. "Hidden come here." He said to his pet. Hidden came to the cave and noticed her. He growled at her and walked carefuly into the cave. "Hey she friend not enemy. If you keep growling at her I wont feed you." He said to the pet as he casually tosed a piece of the deer to his pet. "You shure you not want food?" He asked her. "No. Well ya. Ill take some. Why do you have all those ald things like your clothing its like from the eighteenth century?" She asked and whent to the deer and picked off some of the meat. "I never keep up with time I have clothing like this cause I like it. It fit my personality to well. I wonder how long Ive slept since I last was a wake."

"Wow you must be one of the oddest humans Ive ever met." Rana said as she got up from her crouch and walked to the cave opening. "Human? What? Im not of this world so how I be Human?" Death said as he tore some more meat from the deer. "You look human. You say your not from this earth so were are you from?" She said as she looked towards Hidden. "Were did you get that wolf?" "Im not from any were. I was a creation of the creater. What is Hidden? A wolf you said right? What is that?" He says looking confused as the word leaves his mouth. "A wolf is a hunter a creature of the forest. I havent seen any since the war that distroyed what was the earth mostly at least it just distroyed what it once was I gess is a way to put it." "Huh. I havent seen a war latelty. Why are you here?" Shadow said as he began to turn around he saw something rush into the cave. "Get down" He yells and brings one of his shadow blades out to bare down on the thing. The creature stops short of Death and looks curiosly to the carcusse. Death grabs the deer and throws it to the thing. "Get" "What was that, and why did you give it the deer?" Rana said. "It was a shacan or creature of scavange. It comes here in diffrent ways and it suprised me this time. Thats why I told you to duck. I didnt know that it was the scavanger until it stoped moving."