The Denomic Chronicle

[ShikaX]

This is my first story and I hope that you guys like it. none of the chapters will be extreemly long.

Anyways, I present to you, The Demonic Chronicle!
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The Demonic Chronicle

Chapter one
The boy

It was a starry night in Koru’s village. He always loved the stars. They were the only things that were like him, each one. Different. He was much different then the other kids at school. He had a mark on his hand, a mark of a demon. The mark looked like ancient writings. Not even the elders knew what it meant. It always brought bad luck though.

Koru was a tall, cunning young man. His age was thirteen. His hair was short, black and spiked. His eyes were a silver color. His skin was slightly pale. He wore a black long shirt, black ripped jeans to go with it. Then he wore black gloves, covering the mark on his hand, and black shoes. Most people would be frightened by hi appearance. In fact, almost all were.

“Koru!!!” Yelled a man who disliked Koru with the burning hatred of a thousand suns. Koru turned his head towards the man not caring what he had to say. Koru had a habit of that. After everyone hating him he thought that what’s the point of listening if it’s just going to be the same old thing over and over. He closed his eyes and, ignoring the man, and lay down on the roof of the small house.

“Go back to where you came from! Go back to your pathetic little cabin!!!” the man yelled. Koru ignored him. He opened his eyes to look at the stars and the shining full moon. The man climbed onto the roof and then kicked Koru off.” That serves the little brat right.” He muttered to himself. Then the man walked back into the house that Koru was laying on, the man’s house.

Koru skittered along the ground. He got up, dusted himself off, put his hands in his pockets and slowly walked away. He had a cut on his right arm. The blood dripped. He ignored. His left leg was bruised easily. He ignored. This was his main personality at this point. Being ignorant.

[Frogs557]

dude... awesome... are you gonna finally explain Korus origins?

[ShikaX]

dude... awesome... are you gonna finally explain Korus origins?

This is a different Koru.

[Frogs557]

oh, okay... It's still really kewl

[ShikaX]

I wish more then one [erson would bother to read it. :(

[Frogs557]

would you please read the my stories thread that I made?

[ShikaX]

Have people even bothered to read it?? :( I'm weally sad.

[DestinyHolder]

I love it,I think its realy good shika

[ShikaX]

One more person to add to my fan club. Yippeee.

[ShikaX]

Sorry for the double post.
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Chapter II
Preparing

Koru lay on his makeshift bed in his cabin. He closed his eyes. He was in no mood for anything recently. In no mood at all for being annoyed. He opened his eyes and looked at the mark on his hand. It read, Ο γιος του διαβόλου. He had no clue what it meant. He looked at for a long time and only thought of one solution. The Ruins. They had writings just like it there. It also had this demonic-looking statue. It gave anyone horrifying nightmares when they fell asleep. Just like Koru did.

Koru put things into a sack. The sack turned out to be rather light. For all it held where two books, three apples, a canteen, and a piece of candy he found on the floor the other day.

This was the hard part. He knew there were tons of wild animals on the trip there. He had to get something for protection. It was night and he knew everyone was sleeping. He slowly snuck out of his cabin and walked towards the Blacksmith’s shop.

He was hiding in a tree thinking of a plan for the stealing. He knew the front door was locked. And all the windows were locked. Breaking a window would be too loud. Trying to picklock the door would take too long. Then he saw the chimney.

[Roxas 1994]

It's cool. I like it.

[ShikaX]

Sorry for the double post.
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Chapter II
Preparing

Koru lay on his makeshift bed in his cabin. He closed his eyes. He was in no mood for anything recently. In no mood at all for being annoyed. He opened his eyes and looked at the mark on his hand. It read, Ο γιος του διαβόλου. He had no clue what it meant. He looked at for a long time and only thought of one solution. The Ruins. They had writings just like it there. It also had this demonic-looking statue. It gave anyone horrifying nightmares when they fell asleep. Just like Koru did.

Koru put things into a sack. The sack turned out to be rather light. For all it held where two books, three apples, a canteen, and a piece of candy he found on the floor the other day.

This was the hard part. He knew there were tons of wild animals on the trip there. He had to get something for protection. It was night and he knew everyone was sleeping. He slowly snuck out of his cabin and walked towards the Blacksmith’s shop.

He was hiding in a tree thinking of a plan for the stealing. He knew the front door was locked. And all the windows were locked. Breaking a window would be too loud. Trying to picklock the door would take too long. Then he saw the chimney.

Just for everyone to see, and thnx

[Frogs557]

dude... LOVE IT!!! will there be a character named Xairin in it? (pretty please?)

[ShikaX]

dude... LOVE IT!!! will there be a character named Xairin in it? (pretty please?)

Sorry, This is all about Koru, and his father. But his father is someone that no one knows :P

[KH2_FinalSora]

Okay, don't hate me for this.....

It's a good story, and you've described the setting well. What you haven't descrbed is koru. No one knows even a general idea of what he looks like (he could look different from the rp vers.)) You don't have to blatently say it, but you could have hinted at it, such as when you were describing the stars.

Koru's *insert color* hair shined in the moon and stars.

Crappy example, but I'm not in a creative mood right now.

[ShikaX]

Didn't I go that in the first chapter?...... *thinks*

[Kize]

This is my first story and I hope that you guys like it. none of the chapters will be extreemly long.

Anyways, I present to you, The Demonic Chronicle!
***

The Demonic Chronicle

Chapter one
The boy

It was a starry night in Koru’s village. He always loved the stars. They were the only things that were like him, each one. Different. He was much different then the other kids at school. He had a mark on his hand, a mark of a demon. The mark looked like ancient writings. Not even the elders knew what it meant. It always brought bad luck though.

Koru was a tall, cunning young man. His age was thirteen. His hair was short, black and spiked. His eyes were a silver color. His skin was slightly pale. He wore a black long shirt, black ripped jeans to go with it. Then he wore black gloves, covering the mark on his hand, and black shoes. Most people would be frightened by hi appearance. In fact, almost all were.

“Koru!!!” Yelled a man who disliked Koru with the burning hatred of a thousand suns. Koru turned his head towards the man not caring what he had to say. Koru had a habit of that. After everyone hating him he thought that what’s the point of listening if it’s just going to be the same old thing over and over. He closed his eyes and, ignoring the man, and lay down on the roof of the small house.

“Go back to where you came from! Go back to your pathetic little cabin!!!” the man yelled. Koru ignored him. He opened his eyes to look at the stars and the shining full moon. The man climbed onto the roof and then kicked Koru off.” That serves the little brat right.” He muttered to himself. Then the man walked back into the house that Koru was laying on, the man’s house.

Koru skittered along the ground. He got up, dusted himself off, put his hands in his pockets and slowly walked away. He had a cut on his right arm. The blood dripped. He ignored. His left leg was bruised easily. He ignored. This was his main personality at this point. Being ignorant.

Amazing shika! I barely write any better than that, in fact, I'm gonna post the beginning of one of my stories. I loved that!

[KH2_FinalSora]

ah! you did....god I'm such a wreck right now..........

[ShikaX]

It's Okay KH2.

And thanxz Kize. I'm gonna write the third chapter soon.

[Frogs557]

Okay, don't hate me for this.....

It's a good story, and you've described the setting well. What you haven't descrbed is koru. No one knows even a general idea of what he looks like (he could look different from the rp vers.)) You don't have to blatently say it, but you could have hinted at it, such as when you were describing the stars.

Koru's *insert color* hair shined in the moon and stars.

Crappy example, but I'm not in a creative mood right now.

dude... he did describe koru in chapter 1...

[Kize]

It's Okay KH2.

And thanxz Kize. I'm gonna write the third chapter soon.

Ok! And one more thing, could you read my story when I post it. :D

[KH2_FinalSora]

Wait! I remember my second comment. Although the chapter system is good, you're leaving your chapters slightly too short. I completely gave up on chapters and just began on parts.

[ShikaX]

Wait! I remember my second comment. Although the chapter system is good, you're leaving your chapters slightly too short. I completely gave up on chapters and just began on parts.

eehhh I'm just doing a story. I'm not the good. I can' t make things too long. It would take me too long.