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Rex
07-05-2007, 01:50 PM
would this be better as a game or a moive. or both.



This is about what happened to me when my life changed from good to bad and it kept getting worse. I still remember the day my life changed for the worse it was June 12, 4023. I was released from work early so my wife and I could go on vacation. When I got into the drive way she was standing in the doorway. The look on her face made me worry. As she gave me the letter in her hand I knew what it was about when I saw the symbol on the letter it read
Mr. Darkheart
We write you for one reason. We have selected you to join the army a week from Monday we ask you to be ready when we come to escort you to the base.
These words went through my head all week until that day came when the army truck came to pick my up. As I left I could hear my wife crying. Before I got on the truck I turned to her and told her I will come back. She had my word. As the truck left my hometown and entered the army base all I could think about was to end this quickly. For the next 2 years we trained like there was no tomorrow. When our commander said that we graduated I knew I could finally go home. Before we could get on the bus home the call came in and my heart stopped, “Attention all army personal. Attention we have just got word that China, Europe, and Japan have joined forces to fight agents USA and South America. We have entered world war III”. As I looked around I could see their faces some had excitement others had rage. From now until the story is over I suggest anyone with weak stomachs and hearts to stop reading this and read a nicer story than this. For all the people who are still reading this be ready for anything! As the truck got closer to the battleground I could hear two jets overhead and the explosions off to the distance. Some of the solders were hoping it would be a short war with minor casualties. When the trucks doors opened we were devastated. All around us death and killing screams of pain in the thick fog. Our commanders ordered us into a Trench so the barrage of bullets wouldn’t hit us. As we fell in the trench the bullets flew over our heads. Some didn’t make it. They just lay on the ground not moving. As the commanders stood up and started to tell us that this war is important to our country but before they could finish a bullet hit each of them. As I stared at the lifeless bodies of my commanders I felt my body move. I took the commanders guns and began to charge at the enemy. I looked back at the soldiers and saw that all of them had followed me to the enemy. As the bullets rushed past me all I could think about was the promise that I made and at that very moment I PLANNED TO KEEP IT. The enemies threw poison gas at us but the gas didn’t effect us. We were determined to win. When we entered the enemy’s strong hold we blasted every thing in sight. Every enemy ran for their life but I wouldn’t let them live. The fight lasted 4 hours but to me it lasted years. As we began to celebrate we got word that the enemy’s second wave has entered the battle. Before I could leave I saw something in one of the solders hands when I picked it up the photo of the solders wife and children my heart stopped. As I got back into the trench I knew I couldn’t do this any more I couldn’t kill any more people. As I gazed over the trench’s walls my heart jumped into my throat. There beside a wounded solder in the middle of the battlefield was a child. As the enemy forces got closer I commanded one of the solders to help the wounded solder and the child. As I ran to the two of them I saw a bomb next to the kid. The horrified thought that they were using kid as sacrifice for their victory ignited the rage inside. As I ran to the enemy’s solders with the bomb in hand. The bullets hitting me, as I got closer with the bomb I detonated it and at that vary moment I knew.

I would not be returning home

MarluxiaRules
07-05-2007, 05:59 PM
It sounds pretty good, but I think you should have delved a bit more into why the war started and what it was being fought over. Being WWIII and 4023-25, I would think something like it being fought over natural resources or a race to occupy another planet or something, lol. But for the rest it sounds like it would make a good game. I think that that would be difficult to pull off as a film. Only problem is, there are already several games/films like that in the industry, so it needs something more specific or original in order to separate it from the clutter. You can do it though, I've read more of your work. Good job.

Rex
07-05-2007, 09:48 PM
It sounds pretty good, but I think you should have delved a bit more into why the war started and what it was being fought over. Being WWIII and 4023-25, I would think something like it being fought over natural resources or a race to occupy another planet or something, lol. But for the rest it sounds like it would make a good game. I think that that would be difficult to pull off as a film. Only problem is, there are already several games/films like that in the industry, so it needs something more specific or original in order to separate it from the clutter. You can do it though, I've read more of your work. Good job.

so you have seen angel war?

MarluxiaRules
07-05-2007, 09:59 PM
Angel War was the one you posted a few weeks ago, yes? Yep, Great stuff I would definitly pick that up. No joke.

Rex
07-05-2007, 10:30 PM
Angel War was the one you posted a few weeks ago, yes? Yep, Great stuff I would definitly pick that up. No joke.

I have 20 more.

MarluxiaRules
07-05-2007, 10:41 PM
I have 20 more.

Whoa, that's a lot of thinking..... lol

Rex
07-05-2007, 10:42 PM
Whoa, that's a lot of thinking..... lol

well I have to think of cool games. its my homework.

MarluxiaRules
07-05-2007, 10:49 PM
well I have to think of cool games. its my homework.

I woudn't mind doing that kind of homework. lol. Obviously you are planning on becoming some form of video-game designer...anybody in particular you hope to work for?

Rex
07-05-2007, 10:51 PM
I woudn't mind doing that kind of homework. lol. Obviously you are planning on becoming some form of video-game designer...anybody in particular you hope to work for?

I have had some people call me.

MarluxiaRules
07-05-2007, 10:55 PM
I have had some people call me.

Can't say, huh? Bummer.

Rex
07-05-2007, 10:58 PM
Can't say, huh? Bummer.

no I can tell you.

MarluxiaRules
07-05-2007, 11:03 PM
no I can tell you.

Oh.......but you still didn't.;) It's alright I won't pry. But yeah so far I've liked you work, set aside a detail here or there, but otherwise promising work.

Rex
07-05-2007, 11:06 PM
Oh.......but you still didn't.;) It's alright I won't pry. But yeah so far I've liked you work, set aside a detail here or there, but otherwise promising work.

No i was waiting to tell you. ok. I have heard from capcom and this morning I hurd from SE. Still have to call them back. also some anime crators want to make some of my Ideas anime.

Axizol
07-05-2007, 11:08 PM
i say movie, it's too complex for a video game, and it has too many side-plots

MarluxiaRules
07-05-2007, 11:10 PM
No i was waiting to tell you. ok. I have heard from capcom and this morning I hurd from SE. Still have to call them back. also some anime crators want to make some of my Ideas anime.

SE as in Square Enix? Really? Hmmmmm..........I've never seen a non-japanese name on any of the credit rolls.........I didn't know they hired outside of Japan......

Capcom, that's cool. I'll look for your name on the next Devil May Cry game, lol.

Rex
07-05-2007, 11:14 PM
SE as in Square Enix? Really? Hmmmmm..........I've never seen a non-japanese name on any of the credit rolls.........I didn't know they hired outside of Japan......

Capcom, that's cool. I'll look for your name on the next Devil May Cry game, lol.

I live in japan. I moved to japan when I started college. figeored I could get a better education in video games.

K H P
07-05-2007, 11:20 PM
Hmm, this seems like it would be better in the Fanfic and Literature Section no?

Raccoon
07-05-2007, 11:35 PM
I don't like that Amarican hero. It's very unoriginal. Sorry to say it.